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The John/Rodney-what-got-turned-into-a-woman spanking (now with gender issues!) story is continuing apace. Damn phone kept ringing as soon as I started writing so I unplugged it. I'm having to cut this paragraph, which I liked, so I thought I'd share it.
And then he hugged John and since he was standing and John was still sitting on the bed, John had his face in Rodney's chest. It felt flat, actually flatter than when he was male, which was slightly odd. But mostly, it just felt soft from the well-worn T-shirt and smelled good, like Rodney smell. It was a kind of peppery mushroom smell, was the best he could describe it, but good, and familiar. Rodney.
The standing thing also meant than John had a perfect opportunity to cup Rodney's excellent bottom, and after a minute of very nice hugging, he decided to take full advantage of this by pinching it. Rodney jumped and smacked him on the head. And then pounced him in a very sexy, but somewhat lung-crushing manner.
Do you think changing over from John's POV to Rodney's in the middle would be bad or good? Kelp me, Obi-wan Henobi.
And then he hugged John and since he was standing and John was still sitting on the bed, John had his face in Rodney's chest. It felt flat, actually flatter than when he was male, which was slightly odd. But mostly, it just felt soft from the well-worn T-shirt and smelled good, like Rodney smell. It was a kind of peppery mushroom smell, was the best he could describe it, but good, and familiar. Rodney.
The standing thing also meant than John had a perfect opportunity to cup Rodney's excellent bottom, and after a minute of very nice hugging, he decided to take full advantage of this by pinching it. Rodney jumped and smacked him on the head. And then pounced him in a very sexy, but somewhat lung-crushing manner.
Do you think changing over from John's POV to Rodney's in the middle would be bad or good? Kelp me, Obi-wan Henobi.
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I want tacos. :/
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You mean middle of school semester or school day? *confused*
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I mean it's the middle of the semester and I have HW up the ass
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That sounds extremely uncomfortable. I wish you luck. And tacos!
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As for POV changes -- how confident are you as an author? Together with Auburn, I fear no switching in that regard, either, but otherwise, I think it generally requires a v. good reason (which you may just have; I assume you've pondered this).
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You seem to have a good handle on what you want to say as well as how it'd come across in either perspective, so for what that's worth, do try the POV switch(es).
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I like that :)
Hmm, I've done changing POV in the middle of a fic. Although I called it part one and two and it wasn't in the middle of a scene, although that might work, too. I guess it depends (which isn't a very helpful answer, sorry).
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I like that :)
Cut! It is cutified! But I might add it back in. I already added back in the bit about soft T-shirts, because mmm, how can anyone not like soft T-shirts?
I was actually thinking of doing a part 1 and 2 and having Part 2 start with Rodney POV, then go back to John. I usually hate when someone writes the same scene twice from different POVs, but this might be one of those times it could work.